Creative Writing

I've now had two Creative Writing lessons. The first one was to write an introduction to yourself.   I don't do very well at introductions.  She wanted us to write a little bit about who we are and why we're taking the class.  My intro was very short...and it wasn't interesting enough to get anyone's interest.  I just didn't know what I wanted to say.  I wrote that I was a highly stressed 45 year old mother of two who was also a martial artist, that I was taking the writing class to try to hone my writing skills.  

My second lesson, on Friday, was a lesson on writing descriptively.  The assignment was to light a candle and then describe the candle
Here's what I wrote:
 

The candle is a dusky red, reminiscent  of the apples the scent is advertised to be on the jar .  I light my match and apply it to the wick.  The flame catches slightly, then takes and the wick begins to burn.  I hold the match until that flame is nothing but a tiny ember, then run the tap in the sink and immerse it underneath, to quench the ember.  My candle flame flickers, growing first shorter, then taller as it burns.  The flame reaches above the rim of the candle jar, its end pointy and alternately yellow, orange and then black from the smoke.  The smoke from the flame is straight, then circular, and back to straight.  As the wick burns, the wax below it widens out slowly, from a shallow indentation to a deeper well.  The wick is black at the end, but down in the candle, the wick is still a pristine red.  The flame leans in toward me, then retreats toward the other side of the jar.  As it does, I watch the smoke rise and the air shimmer above it with a suppressed promise of heat and potential destruction if not monitored closely.  

Copyright M. Nico 2/19/11

The instructor said that words such as "dancing" were ones people typically use when they describe flames.  I tried to convey a slightly different thought with my candle.